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:I created the intro because I believe the original article is about Guinea pigs/Caviis. The long hair type from Peru and 'cobaia' were give-aways. (If erroneous which is unlikely, it should be corrected.)I uhh, am no biologist am quessing there are many species like dogs and cats. I will work on confirming this info. [[Usor:Jondel|Jondel]] 10:12, 8 Ianuarii 2012 (UTC)
::It doesn't look like you wrote this part of the intro. The first sentence is saying that the ''one'' species "Cavia porcellus" has individuals from one or many species in the Cavia genus. This would be appropriate if the lemma was "[[:en:Cavia|Cavia]]" (=guinea pig/cavy) generally—a ''cavia'' could be anything in the genus ''Cavia''—but the lemma is "[[:en:Cavia porcellus|Cavia porcellus]]") (=domestic guinea pig) which is only the one species. If the page is going to be about all species of guinea pigs and cavies, it should be moved to [[cavia]] and the first sentence updated. If it's only going to be about the domestic guinea pig, the first sentence needs to be rewritten. (It might need to be rewritten anyway. It's worded awkwardly and looks like it could also mean that the species itself comes from multiple species, but this would be unusual for a mammal, and I don't think en.wiki suggests this is the case.) —[[Usor:Mycēs|Mucius Tever]] 17:47, 8 Ianuarii 2012 (UTC)
:::I made [http://la.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Cavia_porcellus&diff=1837641&oldid=1837561 this] which was what I thought, the intro you were referring to. Iacobus made and immpressive improvement. I used the word cobaia then. I copied the template from the feles article.
:::I think the article should be and originally was about guinea pigs/cavy's /cavia porcellus. I guess that means a rewrite is required at the first sentice.'coming from many species' must be deleted.
:::In a few days time I would like to write the genus Cavia, unless someone else would like to write it first.
:::I feel that the second paragraph needs a lot of rewrite.(The lover cavy's yell at each other.' ?)
:::Please go ahead make the changes. They would be highly appreciated. If not, let work on them in a few days time..[[Usor:Jondel|Jondel]] 10:17, 9 Ianuarii 2012 (UTC)
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